Arranging ideas in chronological oder
Moment of broken heart
Event
- I had a close friend in high school.
- I like my close friend and he like
me too.
- He was my boyfriend.
- He was breaking off relations with
me.
- I was heartbroken.
- I used a long time to get better.
- We can’t be friend.
Two years ago,
of my life it was awful moment. In high school, I had a close friend and we
like each other. Next time, we agreed to begin a relationship and he was my boyfriend.
However, begin in a relationship wasn’t always easy it had a good and troubled
time. One day he picked a quarrel with me until he was breaking of relations
with me. He gave a reason that we shall go back to being friend. I was
heartbroken. After that, I used a long time to get better by traveling. I was
able to heal the wounds from awful breakup. We can’t be friend any more it’s
just someone who knows. When I was him, I thought of the bad time. I hope
the new beginning of loves must be better than because no one wants to be
broken heatedly.
Your story is really sad. I think that your story is good but it is still a little wrong grammatically. It make me cofuse a little so I will give you 7/10.
ตอบลบyour story is good but so sad. I will give you 8.5 points.
ตอบลบI'm sorry about that happening.I give you 9.
ตอบลบYour story is good, but you have a little mistake, such as this sentence "it was awful moment." I think you forgot to add "an" before awful and this sentence "We can’t be friend any more it’s just someone who knows." I think you should write "We can’t be friend anymore, it’s just someone who knows." So I give you 8/10.
ตอบลบYour story is very sad and you have some mistakes in Grammar. I want you to check it again, I give you 8/10.
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